[教育]掌握寫(xiě)作技巧增添表達(dá)亮點(diǎn)

1、淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,1,掌握寫(xiě)作技巧 增添表達(dá)亮點(diǎn),,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,2,2009年山東省高考英語(yǔ)作文各檔次的給分范圍和要求第一檔（優(yōu)秀）26分-29分 緊扣主題；覆蓋所有要點(diǎn)，內(nèi)容充實(shí)；語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)多樣，詞匯豐富，有效使用連接成分，顯示出較強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用表達(dá)能力；語(yǔ)言小錯(cuò)不超過(guò)4個(gè)，不能有一處大錯(cuò)。第二檔（良好）22分-25分 緊扣主題，覆蓋所有要點(diǎn)，內(nèi)容較充實(shí)，語(yǔ)言有少量錯(cuò)誤，但基本不影響意思表達(dá)；大錯(cuò)不超過(guò)3個(gè)。

2、第三檔（一般）18分-21分 緊扣主題，基本覆蓋所有要點(diǎn)，能夠表達(dá)基本內(nèi)容；語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤已影響了部分意思的表達(dá)，但多數(shù)句子基本正確。,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,3,Dear Tom , It has been a long time since I met you last time . I miss you very much . How are you ? I’m very grateful to

3、you for your help with my English when I studied in your country . I wouldn’t speak English so fluently now without you . So now I can’t thank you enough . By the way , do you keep in touch with Mr. Smith ? Is he

4、fit ? I’m very concerned about him . If you could visit him , please remember me to him . Furthermore , would you mind making me know how to contact him ? Eventually, I’m glad to tell you our Spring Festival , the

5、 most important one in China , is coming . And I remember you once told me you like China . Would you like to come here and enjoy the Chinese traditional customs and culture ? I will expect your coming . Best wishe

6、s ! Yours,

7、 Li Hua,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,4,Group １◆I like reading while my brother likes watching television.◆I like reading while my brother enjoys watch

8、ing television.,Group ２◆There will be an increase in the number of people’s jobs ◆There will be an increase in the number of jobs for people in Beijing.,,,available,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,5,Group ３◆It will have an import

9、ant effect on the development of Beijing.◆It will have a(n) effect on the development of Beijing.Group ４◆It is very useful to practise English every day .◆It is to practise English eve

10、ry day .,,of great value /of great help /of great importance,significant /far-reaching /profound / vital,of great/vital use,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,6,Group 5 ◆He told me that the question was now being discussed.◆He told me that the q

11、uestion was now .Group 6◆Suddenly I had a good idea.◆Suddenly I a good idea.◆ A good idea me.,,came up with,occurred to,under discussion.,under repair / con

12、trol /consideration/construction,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,7,Group 7◆He has decided to be a teacher when he grows up.◆ He has to be a teacher when he grows up.Group 8◆ Last Sunday we had a good time in the park

13、◆Last Sunday we in the park,,enjoyed ourselves / had fun,made up his mind /determined,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,8,◆At noon we had a picnic lunch in the sunshine. Then we had a short rest. Then we sang and danced. We p

14、layed happily. ◆ At noon we had a picnic lunch in the sunshine. After a short rest, we had great fun singing and dancing.,,have fun doing,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,9,2.他站在那兒，什么也不干。,,He stood there doing nothing .,He stood there and (he)

15、did nothing .,,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,10,3.人們說(shuō)中國(guó)每年有成千上萬(wàn)的人死于吸煙.,,People say that tens of thousands of people die from smoking every year in China .（賓語(yǔ)從句）,Tens of thousands of people are said to die from smoking every year in China .（被動(dòng)

16、語(yǔ)態(tài)）It’s said that tens of thousands of people die from smoking every year in China . （主語(yǔ)從句）,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,11,4.青島是一個(gè)美麗的城市, 它有百年的歷史.,Qingdao is a beautiful city and it has a history of one hundred years. （并列句）,Qingdao is a b

17、eautiful city, which has a history of one hundred years.（非限制性定語(yǔ)從句）Qingdao is a beautiful city with a history of one hundred years. （with +賓語(yǔ)）Qingdao is a beautiful city （dating back to/dating from) one hundred yea

18、rs ago.（非謂語(yǔ)）,,,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,12,Voices from experts,閱卷老師在評(píng)閱時(shí)最注重的是文章中的亮點(diǎn)，根據(jù)語(yǔ)言使用情況，亮點(diǎn)的多少而定出檔次，所以考生在書(shū)面表達(dá)上的亮點(diǎn)是取得優(yōu)秀的關(guān)鍵，亮點(diǎn)主要包括：一、語(yǔ)言地道、詞匯豐富；二、語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)多樣；三、文章連貫自然。,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,13,,*不要刻意追求高級(jí)詞匯和復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)。,注意,Experts:個(gè)別考生片面追求花哨文字，結(jié)果造出一些錯(cuò)誤百出的句子，這是寫(xiě)作的一

19、大忌。高考寫(xiě)作時(shí)應(yīng)盡可能運(yùn)用自己熟悉的詞匯和句式，盡量避免錯(cuò)誤的出現(xiàn)。一篇文章即便用的詞匯再高級(jí)、語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)再?gòu)?fù)雜，若是滿(mǎn)篇小錯(cuò)，閱卷老師也不會(huì)給文章一個(gè)較高檔次的分值的。,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,14,the China Pavilion,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,15,2010年世博會(huì)將于5月1日-10月31日上海召開(kāi)，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)描述上海有關(guān)情況。（請(qǐng)用一句話(huà)描述每一個(gè)要點(diǎn)）1、上海是一座有著700多年歷史的城市，占地面積為6340平方公里，是我

20、國(guó)最大的城市。2、上海位于黃埔江畔 ，交通便利。3、中國(guó)館由中國(guó)國(guó)家館、中國(guó)地區(qū)館、港澳臺(tái)館三部分組成，是世博園中最引人注目的建筑。4、上海市民正積極準(zhǔn)備迎接全世界人民的到來(lái)。參考詞匯：世博園：the Expo Site 中國(guó)館 ： the China Pavilion 中國(guó)國(guó)家館: the Chinese National Pavilion 中國(guó)地區(qū)館: the Chinese&#

21、160;Provinces Pavilion 港澳臺(tái)館: the Pavilion 0f Hong Kong、Macao and Taiwan市民：citizen,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,16,1、上海是一座有著700多年歷史的城市，占地面積為6340平方公里，是我國(guó)最大的城市。Shanghai , the largest city of China , which covers

22、 an area of 6,340 square kilometers , has a history of more than 700 years .,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,17,,2、上海位于黃埔江畔 ，交通便利。 Shanghai lies on the Huangpu River , making /which makes it convenient for people to arrive .Shanghai lies on

23、 the Huangpu River with a convenient transportation.,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,18,3、中國(guó)館由中國(guó)國(guó)家館、中國(guó)地區(qū)館、港澳臺(tái)館三部分組成, 是世博園中最引人注目的建筑 。The China Pavilion, the most attractive building in the Expo Site ,is made up of  / consists of / comprise

24、s the Chinese National Pavilion、the Chinese Provinces Pavilion and Hongkong,Macao and Taiwan.,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,19,4、上海市民正積極準(zhǔn)備迎接全世界人民的到來(lái)。Shanghai citizens are doing what they can to welcome the people from all over the world

25、 .Shanghai citizens are doing all / everything they can to welcome the people from all over the world .,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,20,2009 陜西卷 假定你是李華。在一個(gè)英文網(wǎng)絡(luò)論壇上，你看到一個(gè)名叫Grown-up 中學(xué)生發(fā)帖（post）尋求幫助。請(qǐng)根據(jù)帖子內(nèi)容、寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)和要求回帖。,寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：1、告訴Grown-u

26、p要理解父母；2、給Grown-up 提出解決問(wèn)題的具體建議。,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,21,Version 1Hello , Grown-up, I’m sorry to know that you have difficulty in getting along with your mother . But I can understand you just because the problem you are f

27、acing is very common among our teenagers,Version 2Hello , Grown-up, After reading your post , I understand your trouble because I’m also a boy of your age . It’s necessary to do something to solve the problem b

28、etween you and your mother . Here are some suggestions for you .,范文開(kāi)頭句,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,22,范文結(jié)尾句Version 1I believe you will send us the good news that you are expecting before long if you follow my advice .Version 2Good luck

29、to you !Version 3Try your best and I’m sure you will get on well with your parents .,,,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,23,好的開(kāi)頭和好的結(jié)尾會(huì)首先吸引閱卷老師的注意。 1.開(kāi)頭要緊扣主題，開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山。 2. 盡量用一到兩句話(huà)引出主體部分。 3.結(jié)尾要短但要具有鼓舞、激勵(lì)或建設(shè)性。 如果中間內(nèi)容抓住要點(diǎn)表述正確，再恰當(dāng)

30、地使用一些過(guò)渡性詞語(yǔ)，使文章結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)、自然流暢，文章的總體檔次就上去了。,Voices from experts,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,24,09年全國(guó)各地高考范文開(kāi)頭句統(tǒng)計(jì),09江西Everyone knows that a good mood is very important for us whoever we are or wherever we are .,09湖南1How eager I’m to share my exper

31、ience of my first class in the middle school .,09湖南2I can’t wait to tell you my experience of my first class as a teacher .,09福建I’m very glad to receive our letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well .,淘花

32、/百度專(zhuān)用,25,09湖北I’m writing to you for the mobile phone I bought on 20th April ,2008 at Tele Mall .,09全國(guó)Thank you for your letter asking about the rebuilt Qianmen Street . Here is something about it .,09重慶I’m a Chinese s

33、tudent from Xin Hua Middle School , and I have learnt your website is collecting topics .,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,26,09年全國(guó)各地高考范文結(jié)尾句統(tǒng)計(jì),09全國(guó)1Try your best ,and I’m looking forward to your outstanding performance .,09江蘇To make matter eve

34、n worse ,it might also have a bad influence on our health .,09北京Are you happy for me ?I’m looking forward to hearing from you .,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,27,09安徽1Boys and girls ,let’s communicate with our parents right now and create a

35、harmonious family .,09安徽2As for me ,we children should communicate with our parents more frequently to let them know that we have grown up and need more respect . I’m sure they will understand us .,09湖北Take into accoun

36、t all these factors above , I require the company should have a change of it for me as soon as possible .,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,28,What have you got from the lesson ?,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,29,Practice makes perfect,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,30,1.Finish the passage a

37、bove paying attention to the skills in writing .2.Try to sum up many more skills in writing in different ways and share them with your classmates .,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,31,Thanks for your kind attendance!,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,32,中國(guó)每年都會(huì)有幾十萬(wàn)起交通事

38、故，許多人都因此而喪生。據(jù)2009年有關(guān)部門(mén)統(tǒng)計(jì)，中國(guó)的交通事故還在成倍地上升。請(qǐng)針對(duì)這一社會(huì)問(wèn)題談?wù)勗斐蛇@種狀況的主要原因并提出解決的方法。 注意： 1、詞數(shù)120----150； 2、可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，以使行文連貫； 3、參考詞匯：drunk driving醉酒駕駛；the speed limit限速,？,Extended,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,33,,,No one could have failed to n

39、otice the fact that thousands of people lost their lives annually in China, owing to several hundred thousand traffic accidents. A survey conducted in 2009 showed that the car accident are still on the rise at a very hi

40、gh rate. A number of factors account for the high increase of the traffic accidents. Firstly, the fast growing number of private cars contribute to severe traffic jams, making it more likely for car accidents to

41、happen. Secondly, drunk driving may be a deadly killer. Thirdly, some drivers ignore the speed limit and drive too fast.,version,淘花/百度專(zhuān)用,34,Faced with this severe problem, the government should take firm/urgent action

42、to decrease the traffic accidents. In my personal opinion, it would be a good idea to develop adequate public transportation which is effective and punctual.Meanwhile, we should appeal to people to follow traffic rule